AP Research- Peer Editing

[Kate]

Q:What is the correlation between nutrition habits in adolescents and the development of mental disorders?

Define a specific age group for adolescents.

Where is this study conducted?

[Christy Pan]

How does running everyday in a consistent manner improve social welfare and relationship - building skills in Gen Z?

*Respond* Perhaps instead of running, it could be exercise in general，since your question is really specific

[Vanessa Ren]

Question: What elements of Urban Design are most effective in regards to promoting walkability in large American Urban cities?
Could specify the city or provide context on what urban design is. Is "walkability" promoting walking to people or helping the people who already walk regularly?

[Farrah Teng]

Q: To what extent has modern day animated Disney movies portrayal of feminism impacted young girls ability to be confident and independent ?

I feel like you could narrow it down possibly to a certain movie? Or as we know, modern day animated Disney movies portray a lot of diversity of other cultures, such as Encanto with Mexican culture, Turning Red with Chinese culture, etc. Maybe you can talk about the impact of Disney movies on young girls of color.

Because I feel like old Disney movies always portrayed princesses as white people, so if you talk about feminism and other cultures, it would be more specific.

[Isabella Diaz]

Q: As music becomes more complex in the 21st century, at what point does it do more harm than good to American High Schoolers?

Through which ways have music become more complex? Is it because of the increase and advancements in technology?

Specifying or committing to a genre would allow you to narrow in on the topic.

How would you research this?

[LeighAnne Chow]

Q: What domain does the art archive lie under and who contributes to its rules and regulations?

What do you mean by domain? Specify.

What type of rules and regulations?

Specify a region or demographic that this pertains to.

Specify a time period. Modern? Historical?

What do you mean by art archive? online archives?

[Celine Yang]

Q: In 21st century US religion and political subjects are seen as taboo, nonetheless, how do exorcisms and demonic possession create disagreements in the US Court system, and are these practices real?

Perhaps provide a region in the US to focus on. Also your research question is a two part question so I think you should just focus on one to make it more researchable.

[Adnan Mohiuddin]

To what extent does an immigrant nurse's cultural shock/culture affect their likelihood/the intensity of burnout in comparison to their non-immigrant counterparts in the United States?


-Strong topic with many areas to research
-How will it be measured?
-Take out slashes
-Remove to what extent
-Is there a gap?

[Dylan Doan]

How does running everyday in a consistent manner improve social welfare and relationship-building skills in Gen Z?

This is not quite necessary, but perhaps you could define "consistent manner" as in a specific period of time each day.

Social welfare and relationship-building skills are two different fields. Consider only choosing one to narrow your discipline of research.

This is a really good question! But if it ends up being too specific, you could change "running" to "rigorous exercise" but that always depends on what you find for your research.

[Jianing Dong]

Q: What is the impact of the brand Brandy Melville within social media fashion trends on the perception of female teenagers' perception of self body-image.

What specific type of impact? Maybe social/societal?

Try expanding on what types of social media fashion trends and the location of where this is occurring (US?)

[Aiden Kim]

Research question: How does the sexist portrayal of women in video games affect Gen. Alpha's unconscious viewpoints on women in the United States?

Maybe consider a more specific genre of video games? To narrow down the target audience of these sexist portrayals of women, instead of being a whole generation of kids. Or you could also narrow down Gen Alpha's categorization, ie. a specific gender or a group/race of people/kids.

[Rachel Baron]

Q: What factors enable certain recreational sports to achieve long-term integration and popularity in community settings, while others fade away?
Feedback: I would recommend possibly narrowing down the question to a specific recreational sport. I would also attempt to narrow your question down to a specific community

[Ethan Zhou]

How effective is AI at developing successful business choices in comparison to current successful businesses in America?

Feedback: What type of businesses, and what type of AI? Different types of AI have varying efficiency in their respective fields, such as an art AI to art businesses or deepfaking to Record Companies.

[Yiyi Gao]

To what extent does school impact the mental health of high school students' who strive on academic validation in the United States?

[yiyi]

Aug 27, 2024 17:51:08 GMT -8 Yiyi Gao said:

To what extent does school impact the mental health students' who strive on academic validation?
feedback - could specify what type of students (highschool, middle school, or college) and where it takes place, ex. United states